How would I make this piece better? First of all, I would improve the second part of my intro where I included the sound of the band in the background by trying to make the background quieter so I wouldn't have to falsely amplify my voice track, since that sounded kind of unnatural.
I might also take the advice of the class and include the humorous part about Suberi (the source with the hoarse voice) saying he would give Obama a lapdance. I might also bump up some of the voices in the piece instead of having so much narration in the beginning.
If I had had more time, I probably also might have included a part of Obama's speech, which I recorded. He is such a powerful speaker that it might have made the piece really hard-hitting.
There is also something not related to editing that I sort of regretted. The girl in front of me said, "I wonder how many people are here not in support of him [Obama] because I'm not." I kicked myself that I didn't have my recorder on at that point.
In terms of editing, though, I could have made it much smoother. I had a couple of mistakes with pronunciation, the rhythm could have been better and my inflection. Lizzie said she liked what I said in my narration, but I feel like again, with more time, I could have written more for radio (whereas what I said sounded very print-oriented), described the scene. It's also kind of tired to go introduce quote, quote, introduce quote, quote, so I would switch up the format so it wasn't predicatably bouncing back and forth like that.
UMD J-School "Slice Class" -- Multimedia for Print Journalists
This is the class blog for Journalism 328G/28G, "Special Topics in News Writing and Reporting," where we offer a crash course in audio, photo, and video.
How would I make this piece better? First of all, I would improve the second part of my intro where I included the sound of the band in the background by trying to make the background quieter so I wouldn't have to falsely amplify my voice track, since that sounded kind of unnatural.
ReplyDeleteI might also take the advice of the class and include the humorous part about Suberi (the source with the hoarse voice) saying he would give Obama a lapdance. I might also bump up some of the voices in the piece instead of having so much narration in the beginning.
If I had had more time, I probably also might have included a part of Obama's speech, which I recorded. He is such a powerful speaker that it might have made the piece really hard-hitting.
There is also something not related to editing that I sort of regretted. The girl in front of me said, "I wonder how many people are here not in support of him [Obama] because I'm not." I kicked myself that I didn't have my recorder on at that point.
In terms of editing, though, I could have made it much smoother. I had a couple of mistakes with pronunciation, the rhythm could have been better and my inflection. Lizzie said she liked what I said in my narration, but I feel like again, with more time, I could have written more for radio (whereas what I said sounded very print-oriented), described the scene. It's also kind of tired to go introduce quote, quote, introduce quote, quote, so I would switch up the format so it wasn't predicatably bouncing back and forth like that.